Commentaire de texte (bts)
Posted: 26 Nov 2005 17:53
Bonjour, j'aimerai que quelqu'un puisse éventuellement me corrigé mon commentaire et me dire ce qui va, ce qui ne va pas. Est ce que le contenu et la synthaxe sont corrects car jai un niveau assez faible en anglais. Merci par avance.
This text is an extract from the Independent, written by Sarah Strickland the 23 June in 2000. It is entitled: " Cambodian clothing workers take to streets over Conditions".
It deals with tyhe bad conditions of work in a underdeveloped country. The clothing xorkers are on strike because they want better working conditions. This strike takes polace in Phnom Penh in Cambodia.
This text is divided into 3 parts:
1/ the clothing workers are anger in Cambodia.
We learns clothing workers are anger. They go on strike on the sreets of Phnom Penh because they want better pay and shorter hours. Two firms are concerned: The Gap and The Fruit of the Loom.
2/ The garment factory: The backbone of economy.
We can see the industry has expanded rapidly because the number of factory is increasing from 30 to 178 between 1996 and 2000. On the other hand the export sales is too increasing from 378million of dollards to 600 million of dollards between 1998 and 1999. (je trouve que cette phrase est lourde mais je ne ne sais pas comment le dire autrement).
3/ The demand of clothing workers
They want to a minimum wage, the sick leaves, to work shorter hours. On the other hand , they don't want any more suffer from verbal and physical abuse. Lastly, they don't want any longer to be dismissed without reason. But in spite of the regurlarly visit of the inspectors, the clothing workers continue to complain.
To conclude we can says the fact that clothing workers work in bad conditions in Cambodia gives a negative image of employyees. Personnaly I think these employees are heartless, they behave in their own interest. They want to realize a maximum profit, that's why they makr to work their workers in the precariousness. They want to realize economy of sclae, that is to have unskilled labour by the cheap.
The clothing workers are so exploited in Cambodia.
Merci.
This text is an extract from the Independent, written by Sarah Strickland the 23 June in 2000. It is entitled: " Cambodian clothing workers take to streets over Conditions".
It deals with tyhe bad conditions of work in a underdeveloped country. The clothing xorkers are on strike because they want better working conditions. This strike takes polace in Phnom Penh in Cambodia.
This text is divided into 3 parts:
1/ the clothing workers are anger in Cambodia.
We learns clothing workers are anger. They go on strike on the sreets of Phnom Penh because they want better pay and shorter hours. Two firms are concerned: The Gap and The Fruit of the Loom.
2/ The garment factory: The backbone of economy.
We can see the industry has expanded rapidly because the number of factory is increasing from 30 to 178 between 1996 and 2000. On the other hand the export sales is too increasing from 378million of dollards to 600 million of dollards between 1998 and 1999. (je trouve que cette phrase est lourde mais je ne ne sais pas comment le dire autrement).
3/ The demand of clothing workers
They want to a minimum wage, the sick leaves, to work shorter hours. On the other hand , they don't want any more suffer from verbal and physical abuse. Lastly, they don't want any longer to be dismissed without reason. But in spite of the regurlarly visit of the inspectors, the clothing workers continue to complain.
To conclude we can says the fact that clothing workers work in bad conditions in Cambodia gives a negative image of employyees. Personnaly I think these employees are heartless, they behave in their own interest. They want to realize a maximum profit, that's why they makr to work their workers in the precariousness. They want to realize economy of sclae, that is to have unskilled labour by the cheap.
The clothing workers are so exploited in Cambodia.
Merci.