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Hi !

I’m French and I am sending this Private Message to talk you about my online forum.
Do you know who is Beatriz Luengo ?
She is an actress. She played in Un, Dos, Tres (Un paso Adelante), a Spanish serie with Pablo Puyol, Miguel Angel Munoz, Monica Cruz… Moreover, she is a singer. She came out « Hit Lerele », « Mi generacion »… This songs have became hits in France and above all in Spain!
French people are welcoming and very nice. You will be very well there. Consequently, Why don’t you join you ? Moreover, you will chat with lots of French through my forum.
You will do different topics about Beatriz Luengo. There are lots of games in « Canal Libre ». The news about Beatriz. You will create creations…You will talk about music…
It’s very simple to join you in my forum. English people are said to be very nice and very clever that’s why I suggest you to come there. For the moment, there aren’t many English people because he has just opened in English. This is the link : http://beatriz-luengo.hostonet.org/
P.S : If you talk a bit french, you will be a moderator.
There is a website about Beatriz : http://beatriz-luengo.hostonet.org/site ... index.html
No forget if you register you to say the flag. The database are in French (members, search, the connection…)but you will understand easily.

See you soon.
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I’m French and I am sending this Private Message to tell you about my online forum.
Do you know who Beatriz Luengo is ?
She is an actress. She played in Un, Dos, Tres (Un paso Adelante), a Spanish series with Pablo Puyol, Miguel Angel Munoz, Monica Cruz… Moreover, she is a singer. She released ? « Hit Lerele », « Mi generacion »… This songs have become hits in France and above all in Spain!
French people are welcoming and very nice. You will be very well on the forum me paraît plus clair. Consequently, Why don’t you join us ? Moreover, you will chat with lots of French through my forum.
You will do qu'est ce que tu veux dire ? different topics about Beatriz Luengo. There are lots of games in « Canal Libre ». The news about Beatriz. You will create creations… pas très heureux la répétition You will talk about music…
It’s very simple to join us ? ou alors : to join my forum in my forum. English people are said to be very nice and very clever that’s why I suggest you to come [] . For the moment, there aren’t many English people because it has just been opened in English. Here is the link : http://beatriz-luengo.hostonet.org/
P.S : If you talk a bit French, you will be a moderator.
There is a website about Beatriz : http://beatriz-luengo.hostonet.org/site ... index.html
Don't forget if you register you to say the flag je ne comprends pas. The database is in French (members, search, the connection…)but you will understand easily.