texte d'anglais à corriger
Posted: 24 Nov 2006 16:13
Bonjour! J'ai un petit exposé d'anglais à présenter lundi mais, par manque de pratique (pour ne pas dire absence totale de pratique!) j'ai énormément de mal à m'exprimer correctement en anglais. Pourriez-vous jeter un coup d'oeil à ce texte et me signaler et corriger mes fautes? Et, si c'est possible, aussi me suggérer des tournures plus anglaises et mieux élaborées? Merci bcp d'avance!
"I’ve chosen to speak about a film I recently saw , « lord of war ». Realized by Andrew Niccol, it relates the story of Yuri Orlov (played by Nicolas cage), an unkranien whose family has emigrated to US to flee Soviet Uniin. Witness of a gunfight in a restaurant, he understands that killing is, like eating, one of the human basic need. So, the character (bases on real gunrunners) enters in arm dealing and becomes one of the biggest clandestine arms sellers. We follow his opérations from. New-yorker buildings to african dictator ’palaces.This death seller always succeeds to get round the law, working in legato thanks to tricks or ingenious négociations. For instance, he sends to Africa old Army helicopters and, separately, their arms, without being considered as dealing with war machines (weaponries?) because of law weakness. He’s finally arrested by Interpol but he’s released with political pressions due to international relations game in armament. Indeed, gunrunners work too for governments,and those who can condamn him actually need him as a middleman. We can observe here government’ hypocrisie and double discurse about arms trade: if US, France, China, Russia and United Kingdom are the five UNO’s permanent membres they’re too the most important arms suppliers in the world. Following Y.Orlov’s universe, where (in which?) reign money and violence, Niccol establishe s a statement (review?) on the frightening world situation in armament. Figures are actually really appalling. Every minute, a gunfire kills a personn, and, in the same minute,fifteen arms are produced. Last year, there were 630 millions arms circulating in the world. That’s why there’s a gun every twelve personns, including children. Children who armure and more used in armed struggles.
About this,movie opening scène is a real purple passage (morceau de bravoure?): the camera is fixed on a bullet and we follow its course from its fabrication to its use,the moment where it’s shot in a child face who gold a AK 47. Camera positioning offers us a subjective view, very personnal and very harsh too, it gives an atyipical approach. We met this original approach in the whole film. Indeed,this subject is delt with a sort of humor, with irony, that’s, according to me, more efficient that a classical and serious treatment. Indeed, it’s the main character who describes and comments his épisodes, positioning himself more in Spectator than actor of the events he lives.
Moreover, besides this actual and commited aspect, this movy is too the painting of the moral and emotional fall of a man who’s going down into the underworld. From the beginnig, Yuri is an antihero .He’s very cynical, totally embittered, disenchanted. He considers that having arms and fighting and killing is something that is part of human nature,that it’s in our gene and it’s useless to struggle against this. He’s a man who seems totally unscrupulous and amoral, but he actually sometimes lets feelongs springing up. But quickly gold back them he resorts to cynism to cope with his conscience. Therefore,he transforms moments of crualty and harshness in tragi-comedy scenes, freeing himself of the horror of the situation, till becoming almost deshumanized.
But this deshumanisation process is linked too to his emotionnal fall. First of all, he réalises that the amonts of money he earns could permit him to offer all he désires and, particularly, to seduce the woman of his dreams. Orchestrating a meeting the thinks is a coïncidence he impresses her showing off a wealth he hasn’t’ got. This relation based on lies goes on on illusion and déception if he adores her, he doesn’t reveal her who he is and what activities permit him to offer her this perfect and sumptuous life. Therefore, he sinks in a double life that’s going to overwhelm him. He throwes away his son’s plastic gun but still sells arms intended to slaughter civil population. When his wife, more and more suspicious, discovers the reality and demand him to leave arms trade, he doesn’t succee, even if he feels that arms he sells kill his soul and do himself missing his life. Taken in a devilish spiral and addicted, he just can’t (se passer de) power game where he’s shining. We may see here the inconscient vis to go on the road to ruin, thinking that he doesn’t desserve all he has. So, at the end, his wife and son desert, his parents repudiate him after his brocher ,goes with him,because of his insistance, in a opération where he’s killed trying to restore justice. Therefore and despite that we expect, he goes on arms trade and traffic, since it has him lost everything and he is more linked than ever with. That’s why I think that this movy is more than a arms traffic denunciation on a social plan, a vision of a man who destructs himself, lost in a trap he has himself created."
"I’ve chosen to speak about a film I recently saw , « lord of war ». Realized by Andrew Niccol, it relates the story of Yuri Orlov (played by Nicolas cage), an unkranien whose family has emigrated to US to flee Soviet Uniin. Witness of a gunfight in a restaurant, he understands that killing is, like eating, one of the human basic need. So, the character (bases on real gunrunners) enters in arm dealing and becomes one of the biggest clandestine arms sellers. We follow his opérations from. New-yorker buildings to african dictator ’palaces.This death seller always succeeds to get round the law, working in legato thanks to tricks or ingenious négociations. For instance, he sends to Africa old Army helicopters and, separately, their arms, without being considered as dealing with war machines (weaponries?) because of law weakness. He’s finally arrested by Interpol but he’s released with political pressions due to international relations game in armament. Indeed, gunrunners work too for governments,and those who can condamn him actually need him as a middleman. We can observe here government’ hypocrisie and double discurse about arms trade: if US, France, China, Russia and United Kingdom are the five UNO’s permanent membres they’re too the most important arms suppliers in the world. Following Y.Orlov’s universe, where (in which?) reign money and violence, Niccol establishe s a statement (review?) on the frightening world situation in armament. Figures are actually really appalling. Every minute, a gunfire kills a personn, and, in the same minute,fifteen arms are produced. Last year, there were 630 millions arms circulating in the world. That’s why there’s a gun every twelve personns, including children. Children who armure and more used in armed struggles.
About this,movie opening scène is a real purple passage (morceau de bravoure?): the camera is fixed on a bullet and we follow its course from its fabrication to its use,the moment where it’s shot in a child face who gold a AK 47. Camera positioning offers us a subjective view, very personnal and very harsh too, it gives an atyipical approach. We met this original approach in the whole film. Indeed,this subject is delt with a sort of humor, with irony, that’s, according to me, more efficient that a classical and serious treatment. Indeed, it’s the main character who describes and comments his épisodes, positioning himself more in Spectator than actor of the events he lives.
Moreover, besides this actual and commited aspect, this movy is too the painting of the moral and emotional fall of a man who’s going down into the underworld. From the beginnig, Yuri is an antihero .He’s very cynical, totally embittered, disenchanted. He considers that having arms and fighting and killing is something that is part of human nature,that it’s in our gene and it’s useless to struggle against this. He’s a man who seems totally unscrupulous and amoral, but he actually sometimes lets feelongs springing up. But quickly gold back them he resorts to cynism to cope with his conscience. Therefore,he transforms moments of crualty and harshness in tragi-comedy scenes, freeing himself of the horror of the situation, till becoming almost deshumanized.
But this deshumanisation process is linked too to his emotionnal fall. First of all, he réalises that the amonts of money he earns could permit him to offer all he désires and, particularly, to seduce the woman of his dreams. Orchestrating a meeting the thinks is a coïncidence he impresses her showing off a wealth he hasn’t’ got. This relation based on lies goes on on illusion and déception if he adores her, he doesn’t reveal her who he is and what activities permit him to offer her this perfect and sumptuous life. Therefore, he sinks in a double life that’s going to overwhelm him. He throwes away his son’s plastic gun but still sells arms intended to slaughter civil population. When his wife, more and more suspicious, discovers the reality and demand him to leave arms trade, he doesn’t succee, even if he feels that arms he sells kill his soul and do himself missing his life. Taken in a devilish spiral and addicted, he just can’t (se passer de) power game where he’s shining. We may see here the inconscient vis to go on the road to ruin, thinking that he doesn’t desserve all he has. So, at the end, his wife and son desert, his parents repudiate him after his brocher ,goes with him,because of his insistance, in a opération where he’s killed trying to restore justice. Therefore and despite that we expect, he goes on arms trade and traffic, since it has him lost everything and he is more linked than ever with. That’s why I think that this movy is more than a arms traffic denunciation on a social plan, a vision of a man who destructs himself, lost in a trap he has himself created."
! (il est dur, celui-là !)