LokaNova et Freelang

Bonjour, je dois faire un paragraphe sur un film ( peut etre que vous le reconnaîtrez) et j'aimerais corriger mes fautes svp:

After his accident in the bathroom, Nick uses his new "talents" to get into women's minds and use their ideas as his own. This works for awhile, but as he spends more time with Darcy, he finds that he develops feeling for her. He tries to approach itself of his daughter with his "talents" but they are not really reconciled in particular because her boyfriend. Mr Marshall helps a woman of his job too, because she has got suicidal ideas.
He arrives to substitute the place of Darcy in his advertissing company with his new "talents".
A day of rain, Nick is electrocute again in a small lane and he lost his "talents". He starts to think of his acts and he finds that he regrets his actions with Darcy and his daughter.
At Alex's ball, Nick comforts her because she had got problems with her boyfriend. It is thus they were reconciled. He excuses itself with near of Darcy at the end of movie too. He was forgiven by Darcy and the movie finishes well.


Voilà, merci de me corriger
@ bientot

je pense que tu avais deja fait un post la dessus !

appuie sur "repondre" au lieu d'ouvrir un nouveau post c'est plus facile et puis ca suit !

Je ne suis pas absolument sûr d'avoir tout compris : s'agit-il de la fille de Darcy (her daughter) ou de la fille de Nick (his daughter) ?
De même, on ne sait pas d'où sort ce "Mr Marshall", à moins qu'il s'agisse de Nick lui-même...

Enfin, voici le texte corrigé, sans trop de changements :

After his accident in the bathroom, Nick uses his new "talents" to get into women's minds and use their ideas as his own. This works for a while, but as he spends more time with Darcy, he finds that he develops feelings for her. He tries to get closer to his daughter with his "talents" but they are not really reconciled in particular because of her boyfriend. Mr Marshall also helps a woman at his job, because she has got suicidal ideas.
He succeeds in taking the place of Darcy at his advertising company thanks to his new "talents".
A rainy day, Nick is electrocuted again in a small lane and he loses his "talents". He starts thinking of his acts and he finds that he regrets his actions with Darcy and his daughter.
At Alex's ball, Nick comfortd her because she has got problems with her boyfriend. It is thus that they are reconciled. He excuses himself to Darcy at the end of the movie too. She forgives him and the movie has a happy ending.

Mr Marshall >>> Nick
Daughter >>> Alex >>> fillle de Nick

et je suis désolé pour le nouveau topic
et merci beaucoup pour la correction