LokaNova et Freelang

bonjour,

un ami a proposé un texte qu'il a ecrit d'abord en francais et traduit avec un traducteur en ligne ( genre babelfish ), je lui ai proposé certaines corrections... est ce correct ?

en rouge les corrections, en bleu ce que je rajoute

He is a devil man! To deny by all, (denied/ rejected by everyone ) he survives with big punishment. Her (his) father was only a mortal, dead before his birth. His mother a démone ( demoness ) died after the credit note (the credit note ? Pas compris) (was) put in the world. He fights quite in (during) daytime against those that they want ( who want ) to see him dead. But it is (he is) a devil man:

The human devil cries, you are nothing more! The human devil cries, you have no luck to be liked (loved/ appreciated )! The human devil cries, this world is not made for you. The human devil cries, cries, cries, cries …

He is a devil man with feelings! But everybody throws rejects him ( rejected him) because he is different from us. He does not want to leave the beside him demonic top. ( He doesn't want to leave his demoniac side to over it ) But when his pain is too big he cannot refrain from wanting to destroy everything. ( ta phrase est correct mais un peu lourde, on peut dire aussi : When his pain was too big, he just wants to destry everything / He can ben so sad, his desire was to destroy everything ) But it is ( he is ) a devil man


He still believes, he still looks for her, the one who can love him. But even the angels he turn the back ( But even the angels turn their back on him ) and he is alone in front of so much enemy. Nobody wishes her ( his ) presence and he wishes to die. But he is a devil man

For him there will be never the happy end!

The human devil still cries, always cries. His life is only solitude and sadness. His tears continue to flow infinitely.





Merci d'avance

Hello, je fais quelques modifs, mais la VO était vraiment penible à lire.

He is a devil man! Rejected by all, he survives with a big punishment. His father was only a mortal, dead before his birth. His mother, a demoness, died after the credit note ??? was put in the world. He fights quite ??? in the daytime against those who want to see him dead. But he is a devil man.

The human devil cries, you are nothing more! The human devil cries, you are not lucky enough to be loved! The human devil cries, this world is not made for you. The human devil cries, cries, cries, cries …

He is a devil man with feelings! But everybody rejects him because he is different to us. He does not want to leave the beside him demonic top???. But when his pain is too strong he cannot help but destroy everything. He can be so sad, his desire was to destroy everything. But he is a devil man

He still believes, he still looks for her, the one who can love him. But even the angels turn their back on him and he is alone in front of so many enemies. Nobody wants him around and he wants to die. But he is a devil man

For him there will be never a happy end!

The human devil still cries, always cries. His life is only solitude and sadness. His tears continue to flow infinitely.

He does not want to leave the beside him demonic top???.

la personne voulait dire

il ne veut pas laisser son coté demoniaque prendre le dessus.

que j'ai traduit par " he doesn't want to let his demoniac side take over it."

est ce correct ?

je vais essayer d'avoir le version francaise

bon voici la version francaise ainsi que le texte que j'ai pu donc retraduire

Il est un homme démon! Rejeter par tous, il survit avec beaucoup de peine. Son père était seulement un mortel, mort avant sa naissance. Sa mère une démone est morte après l'avoir mise au monde. Il se bat tous les jours contre ceux qu'ils veulent le voir mort. Mais il est un homme démon :

Pleure le démon humain, tu n'es plu rien! Pleure le démon humain, tu n'as aucune chance d’être aimé! Pleure le démon humain, ce monde n'est pas fait pour toi. Pleure le démon humain, pleure, pleure, pleure…

Il est un homme démon avec des sentiments! Mais tout le monde le rejette parce qu'il est différent de nous. Il ne veut pas laisser son côté démoniaque prendre le dessus. Mais quand sa douleur est trop grande, il voudrait juste tout détruire. Mais il est un homme démon :

Il croit toujours, il la cherche toujours, celle qui peut l'aimer. Mais même les anges lui tournent leurs dos et il est seul devant tant d'ennemi. Personne ne souhaite sa présence et il désire mourir. Mais il est un homme démon:

Pour lui il n'y aura jamais de fin heureuse!

Pleure le démon humain, tu n'es plu rien! Pleure le démon humain, tu n'as aucune chance d’être aimé! Pleure le démon humain, ce monde n'est pas fait pour toi. Pleure le démon humain, pleure, pleure pleure…

Le démon humain pleure encore, pleure toujours. Sa vie est seulement pleine de solitude et de tristesse. Ses larmes continuent à couler infiniment.

He is a devil man ! Rejected by everyone, he survives with lots of pain. His father was only a mortal, dead before his birth. His mother, a demoness, died giving him birth. He strikes everyday against the one who want him dead. But he is a devil man :

Cry devil man, you’re nothing anymore. Cry devil man, you have no chance to be loved ! Cry devil man, this world is not made for you ! cry devil man, cry, cry ..

He is a devil man with feelings ! But everyone rejected him because he’s different. He doesn’t want to let his demoniac side take it over. But when his pain is too big, he just want to detroy everything. But he is a devil man.

He still believes, he is still looking for her, the one who can love him But even the angles turn their back on him and he’s aone in front pf enemies. Nobody wishes his presence and he wants to die. But he is a devil man

For him, there is no happy ending !

The devil man cries again and cries again. His life is only filled with loneliness and sadness. His tears still fows constantly.




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