LokaNova et Freelang

Bonjour pourriez vous me corriger mes fautes car je ne suis pas trés doué en anglais.

Canson Mc Cullers is not neutral in this story, she obviously takes sides with the doctor. She presents him as a victim of discrimination an easyprey in the face of racism. Blacks considers whites as ordinary persons, they didn't differentatiate them unlike white. Mc Cullers says clarly that "all Negroes looked similar to white but white men did not sually bother to te face a Negro in theirs minds". The slavery is still fixed in same mentalities. Whites feels more strong. Benedict Mady Copeland is polite all the way trough of this story unlike to the deputy sheriff who a men completely direspectful toward Doctor Copeland in particular in the line 10 to 20. Doctor Copeland expects just to see the judge beause it is for an urgent business. But the deputy sheriff doesn't press and "continued to speak" without embarassment. He makes Dr Copeland wait in the "corridor". And when he callhim, he continued him to speak in a discourteous tone: "COME here, You!!".The deputy sheriff accuses him even to have drinking liquor(line 37) withthout valid reasons. In this passage is about a racial discrimination toward the blacks. And even if Copeland defends against the deputy sheriff, this one "struck him on the face" and "two men graspedhim down....resist"
The end of this passage reveals the ressentment's deputy sheriff against blacks. This man is realy racist in extreme.


Merci et surtout n'hésiter pas à enrichir mon texte et mes tournures de phrases si vous voulez.

Bonsoir Elody,

j'ai relu ton texte et fait les corrections suivantes :

Canson Mc Cullers is not neutral in this story : she obviously takes sides with the doctor. She presents him as a victim of discrimination, an easy prey in the face of racism. Blacks considers whites as ordinary persons, they don't differentatiate them as whites do. Mc Cullers says clearly that "all Negroes look similar to whites but white men don't usually bother to te face (?) a Negro in theirs minds". The slavery is still fixed in some mentalities. Whites feel (pas de s, pluriel) more strong. Benedict Mady Copeland is polite all the way through this story unlike the deputy sheriff, a man completely direspectful toward Doctor Copeland, in particular in the lines 10 to 20. Doctor Copeland just expects to see the judge beause it is an urgent business. But the deputy sheriff doesn't hurry upand "continues to speak" without embarrassment. He makes Dr Copeland wait in the "corridor". And when he calls him, he continues to speak in a discourteous tone: "COME here, you!!".The deputy sheriff even accuses him to have drunk liquor (line 37) without valid reasons. This passage is about racial discrimination towards the blacks (or black people). And even if Copeland defends against the deputy sheriff, this one "struck him on the face" and "two men graspedhim down....resist" (ce n'est pas très clair, qu'avez-vous voulu dire?)
The end of this passage reveals the deputy sheriff's resentment against blacks. This man is really extremely racist.

J'espère que ces corrections vous seront bien utiles et que vous avez compris les corrections. Si ce n'est pas le cas, n'hésitez pas à demander.



Delan