LokaNova et Freelang

bonjour a tous,
j'ai un essai d'anglais à rendre dans une semaine et j'aimerai bien que quelqu'un corrige mes fautes.
Voici le sujet:
"Are you interested in travelling? why? would you spend a year or your life abroad?"
merci d'avance
Flora


On the one hand, I am interested in travelling because it is always an enrichiing experience.We learn lot of things about the country 's customs, sometime we discover an other way of living and it is always interesting to see that humans are really different according to countries.
I have had the luck to travel so far and I hope I ‘ll explore new places for next years.
We generally tour the country during travels so going somewhere else is a mean to improve our minds.
Moreover, when we go on a journey, we can have rest and relax, which is sometime difficult when we ‘re at home.
Thanks to communication we can also do new meetings, and have good time sharing our experiences, in particular between two people coming from different countries.
Travelling,it is also flying. The last time I took the plane was four month ago, when I went in Sweden. For me, it ‘s undoubtedly the men of transport the most exciting since it makes me think of a bird who overlook the world.
Nevertheless, there are people who don’t share the same opinion as me, mainly people who are ill in planes or who are afraid by them.

On the other hand, I wouldn’t mind spending a year abroad since it is an extraorinary and unical experience. Generally, we can have this occasion when we are at the university.
If I realize my plans, I will leave home in three years in order to go in I taly or in a English-speaking country as part as my studies.
I’ve been in Italy and in Sweden with the school for ten days and after this travel,I was speaking the languege very well so going abroab for one year is certainly very useful.
It ‘s well known that it ‘s an excellent mean for progressing in language since we are in the real life and have to ( se débrouiller ) ourselves.
Furthermore I ‘ll meet other people and maybe I ‘ll have a love story, which ‘ll motivate me to stay more time in the country.

Voilà quelques retouches à ton texte, j’ai essayé de ne pas trop le modifier.
La plus grosse faute, c’est « go in ». Quand on « go », on se déplace, et comme on se déplace toujours vers quelque chose, c’est « go to ». Par contre quand on arrive, on ne bouge plus, on est « in » !

On the one hand, I am interested in travelling because it is always an enriching experience. We learn a lot of things about the country 's customs, sometimes we discover another way of living and it is always interesting to see that humans are really different according to countries.
I had the luck to travel so far and I hope I ‘ll explore new places these coming years.
We generally tour the country during travels so going somewhere else is a means of improving our minds.
Moreover, when we go on a journey, we can rest and relax, which is sometimes difficult when we ‘re at home.
Thanks to communications we can also meet new people, and have a good time sharing our experiences, in particular between two persons coming from two different countries.
Travelling is also flying. The last time I took the plane was four months ago, when I went to Sweden. For me, it ‘s undoubtedly the most exciting means of transportation since it makes me think of a bird that flies over the world.
Nevertheless, there are people who don’t share the same opinion as me, mainly people who are ill in planes or who are afraid of them.

On the other hand, I wouldn’t mind spending a year abroad since it is an extraordinary and unique experience. Generally, we get such an occasion when we are at university.
If I realise my plans, I will leave home in three years in order to go to Italy or to an English-speaking country as part of my studies.
I’ve been in Italy and in Sweden with the school for ten days and after this travel, I was speaking the language very well so going abroad for one year is certainly very useful.
It ‘s well known that it ‘s an excellent means of progressing in the language since we are in a true situation and have to make do by ourselves.
Furthermore I’ll meet other people and maybe I ‘ll have a love story, which will motivate me to stay a bit longer in that country.

I wish you good luck !

merci beaucoup!!!!
C'est tres sympa de ta part d'avoir pris du temps pour me corriger mon essai.
Flora