LokaNova et Freelang

Bonjour, pourriez vous me corriger les fautes dans les réponses personnelles que j'ai donné concernant les questions d'un texte qui parlait d'une histoire d'amour et des souvenirs d'enfance du narrateur s'il vous plaît.

1/Où et quand se déroule la scene?

The scene take place near a lake named "Lake Charmain", the day of anniversary drive between Elizabeth and Beck.


2/ donnez quelque details qui décrit le narateur?

The narrator's first name is Beck. He has doubts concerning his couple because he ressent a chasm between him and elizabeth. He hopes his couple will resist to the truth and unspoken lies. He caters to be romantic with elisabeth. On the other hand beck is very nostalgig when he thinks to his childhood. Therefore he is emotive and sensitive. He recalls his meeting with elisabeth when they were younger. The memories make him sad.

3/Expliquer les relations entre beck et elisabeth?

They are married because it is a question of their anniversary drive in the text. Beck takes his woman elisabeth to the lake charmain. During the journey, both seemed to ask questions on their couple. Beck felt a chasm between them. Once arrived, elisabeth is delighted and finds the very romantic place. That's why she makes him a smile and takes him the hand. Near the lake, he remembers that he met elisabeth in this place. He saw again her then and became his classmate. We can guess that they became then loving one of the other one. They lived a love of memorable youth and are always together in spite of the doubts which they can have.

5/expliquez par vos propres mots la phrase suivante: "I could feel the chasm between us. Our relationship had survived so much. I wondered if it could survive the truth. Or for that matter, the unspoken lies."

The relationship between the narrator beck and elisabeth weren't goog. It seems be a "chasm" between them according to beck. Apparently, elisabeth is very pensive at this juncture. May be they feel they don't like each other any more so hardly as in the past but they hide him. May be their life becomes too monotonous compared in the first day.. But beck tries to revive the flame between him and her by taking him to the lake wher they met when they were still chiudren.


Merci de bien vouloir me corriger. J'espère que le contenu n'est pas trop répétitif et inintéressant. merci à vous. Ps: donnez moi votre avi svp.

Je parie que le livre c'est : "Ne le dis à personne", de Harlan Coben

Lodylarose wrote:Bonjour, pourriez vous me corriger les fautes dans les réponses personnelles que j'ai donné concernant les questions d'un texte qui parlait d'une histoire d'amour et des souvenirs d'enfance du narrateur s'il vous plaît.

1/Où et quand se déroule la scene?

The scene takes place near a lake named "Lake Charmain", the day of anniversary drive between Elizabeth and Beck.


2/ donnez quelque details qui décrit le narateur?

The narrator's first name is Beck. He has doubts concerning his couple because he ressents a chasm between him and Elizabeth. He hopes his couple will resist* to the truth and unspoken lies. He caters** to be romantic with elisabeth. On the other hand beck is very nostalgic when he thinks about his childhood. Therefore he is emotive and sensitive. He remembers*** his rendez-vous**** with elisabeth when they were younger. The memories make him sad.

* Je trouve que "resist" va pas... Je dirais : "will [be able to] overcome/endure/get through the truth and the unspoken lies"...
** Sens ? Ce mot ne va pas en tout cas...
*** "recall" a le sens de "rappeler" dans les phrases du genre : "ça me rappelle que..."
**** "meeting" est trop professionnel ici


Merci de bien vouloir me corriger. J'espère que le contenu n'est pas trop répétitif et inintéressant. merci à vous. Ps: donnez moi votre avi svp.

Désolé, je finirai plus tard si j'ai le temps...

Nota : bizarre bizarre... y a quelqu'un qui avait posé une question sur "anniversary drive" récemment ^o)

Merci pour votre début de correction. Il ya 'encore deux questions que voici:

je vous donne mes réponses, pouvez vous me corriger encore une fois les fautes.

I think that this title is the one who correspond best to the text because it is about a back flash. Beck remembers his childhood, that is good moments when he passed with his sister and his grandparents near the lake. It is also in this place he met for thye first time Elisabeth.



Beck and Elisabeth met for the first time when they were children. They were only seven years old when Beck saw Elisabeth in the road near the lake. He cycled and noticed it at one. She walked bizarrely according to beck. Beck remembers that she carried Mary janes and a friendship. She has too many freckles. They saw again each other two weeks in their class and becam classmates. Then they are approached afterward.

Merci de votre aide.

Je veux bien corriger tes fautes, mais j'aimerais que tu en tires quelque chose Par exemple : tu oublies très souvent les "s" à la 3ème personne ! Un peu d'attention pourrait t'éviter ce genre de fautes

lodylarose wrote: I think that this title is the one which corresponds best to the text because it is about a flash back. Beck remembers his childhood, that is good moments when he passed with his sister and his grandparents near the lake*. It is also in that** place he met for thye first time Elisabeth***.

* Tu veux dire quoi ? Ca fait bizarre... On pourrait mettre par exemple : "B. remembers his childhood, that is [to say] all the good moments he had with his sister and his grandparents near the lake".
** "that" (je pense) parce que l'endroit est "éloigné" (dans le texte, dans le temps, etc...)
*** Mieux vaut ne pas dissocier verbe et complément. De plus, "for the first time" est, il me semble, toujours accompagné d'un present/plu perfect : "it is also in that place he has met Elisabeth for the first time".

Beck and Elisabeth have met for the first time when they were children. They were only seven years old when Beck saw Elisabeth in the road near the lake. He was cycling and noticed her at once. She walked bizarrely according to beck*. Beck remembers that she carried Mary janes and a friendship**. She had too many freckles. They saw again each other two weeks in their class and becam classmates. Then they are approached afterward***.

* Y a un lien avec la phrase d'avant ? Si oui, préfère "she was walking...". Sinon, c'est un peu confus...
** Sens ?
*** Tu veux dire quoi ?

Voilà... Essaie de retenir les points que j'ai corrigés... Je sais pas si je pourrais faire le reste... Mais quelqu'un d'autre peut peut-être s'en charger

Merci déja pour ce que vous avez corriger. Cela m'ait bénéfique vos remarques.

Beck remembers that she carried Mary janes and a friendship bracelet.

Là je voulais dire que beck se souvient qu'elisabeth porter des ballerines et un bracelet

Then they are approached afterward***.


et là je veux dire que par la suite ils deviendront de plus en plus proche.

n'est ce pas bon?

lodylarose wrote:Beck remembers that she carried Mary janes and a friendship bracelet.

Là je voulais dire que beck se souvient qu'elisabeth porter des ballerines et un bracelet

Tu avais oublié un mot...

Then they are approached afterward***.

et là je veux dire que par la suite ils deviendront de plus en plus proche.

Et moi je voulais te demander le sens de toute la phrase en bleu... "Ils se sont vus encore 2 autres semaines dans leur classe et devinrent camarades de classe", ça fait bizarre... Ou alors tu échanges : Then, they became classmates and saw each other for 2 weeks in their class... (Mais pourquoi 2 semaines seulement ? après ils ont quitté l'école ? Je me souviens plus...)

Pour la suite : "Later, as time went by, they got closer and closer..."

Désolé, j'ai pas le temps de faire plus et je pense pas que j'aurai le temps...