Bonjour, pourriez vous me corriger mes fautes. Le sujet portait sur les souvenirs et notre avis si ils nous font du mal ou pas. C'était très difficile.
Every one of us have secret memories. They are own for us and couln't to pass on other so easily we could believe. They induce in us feelings of nostalgia most of the time. Even the most joylful mémories can make us sad.
In this text, beck recalls his past, notably his first meeting with elizabeth and the time where he enjoyed near the lake with his sister. This place evokes him the memories of their grandparents. The lake charmain is for him a very symbolic place which reminds him his earlist childhood. He remembers when he plays hide and seek in the woods where the grandfather's beck has left the kid's bunks alone to rot. In addition they adored to be afraid by the myterious histories, they imagines to see to appear suddenly Boogeyman. They remembers as well when he has a swin, the splash and the echos near the lake. These moments were very significant oh his childhood, there are happy memories. To be able to keep intact imagines of his past is a exceptionnal luck because we can think again always at the goods moments that we passed but also to the persons that we loved.. I think that the memories can hurt us in the sens where they could't be relived. It makes us at the same sad and nostalgic moments when we think that it is past and we couldn't return to back knowing that amnesic people suffer because they don't have luck to remember their past, I think that we don't have regret the fact of being able to remember itself happy as bad moments when we passed in our life.
Finally the persons are so different it is difficult to assert that the memories hurt inevitably, they have neither the same experiences nor the same reactions. In my opinion the memories can make unfortunate some persons who doesn't manage to forge ahead and to pass in the other thing. They can make become aware that the time crosses too fast and to call back us the abscence of persons whose missed us. But on the contrary they can make happy, confident and reassuring. Anyway each of us let us need to keep rehearsing us our past that it would be happy or bad. ( pour cette phrase je voulais dire que de tte facon chacun d'entre nous avons des souvenirs dont nous avons besoin de nous reassaser pour vivre, qu'il soit bon ou mauvais)
merci de me répondre.
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Je n'ai pas regardé en profondeur mais quelques remarques :
- They are own for us => they are personal, they are ours
- so easily we could believe => as easily as we could think
- beck recalls his past => becks remembers (attention, c'est pas pareil)
- notably => especially
- the time where he enjoyed => the time when he played
- which reminds him => raté, c'est l'autre (recall => rappeler quelque chose [à quelqu'un] ; remind => se rappeler quelque chose, se souvenir de quelque chose)
- he remembers when he plays => when he played (passé)
- In addition => je verrais plus "moreover" là
- they adored => they loved ?
- they imagines => they imagined
- they remembers => they remember (le s n'est qu'à la troisième personne du singulier)
- he has a swin => swan (cygne) ?
- To be able to keep intact imagines => images ?
- the goods moments that we passed => spent
- in the sens where => je ne crois pas que "dans le sens où" puisse se traduire comme ça
- the persons are so different it is difficult => so difficult that it is...
Voila, il doit encore rester quelques trucs mais j'ai pas trop le temps là. Suivant
- They are own for us => they are personal, they are ours
- so easily we could believe => as easily as we could think
- beck recalls his past => becks remembers (attention, c'est pas pareil)
- notably => especially
- the time where he enjoyed => the time when he played
- which reminds him => raté, c'est l'autre (recall => rappeler quelque chose [à quelqu'un] ; remind => se rappeler quelque chose, se souvenir de quelque chose)
- he remembers when he plays => when he played (passé)
- In addition => je verrais plus "moreover" là
- they adored => they loved ?
- they imagines => they imagined
- they remembers => they remember (le s n'est qu'à la troisième personne du singulier)
- he has a swin => swan (cygne) ?
- To be able to keep intact imagines => images ?
- the goods moments that we passed => spent
- in the sens where => je ne crois pas que "dans le sens où" puisse se traduire comme ça
- the persons are so different it is difficult => so difficult that it is...
Voila, il doit encore rester quelques trucs mais j'ai pas trop le temps là. Suivant
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kokoyaya wrote:Je n'ai pas regardé en profondeur mais quelques remarques :
- every one of us => everybody/each of us + has
- beck recalls his past => becks remembers (attention, c'est pas pareil) --> je t'avais pourtant fait la remarque dans la correction précédente...
- which reminds him => raté, c'est l'autre (recall => rappeler quelque chose [à quelqu'un] ; remind => se rappeler quelque chose, se souvenir de quelque chose) --> en fait, "which reminds him" est correct si tu n'oublies pas le "of" : "which reminds him of his [early] childhood"
- they remembers => they remember (le s n'est qu'à la troisième personne du singulier) --> attention, c'est pourtant pas très difficile le "s" à la 3ème personne
- the goods moments that we passed => spent --> ça aussi je te l'avais corrigé...
- in the sens where => je ne crois pas que "dans le sens où" puisse se traduire comme ça
- the persons are so different it is difficult => so difficult that it is... --> [j'ai pas lu la phrase mais de façon générale préfère "people" à "persons"...]
Voila, il doit encore rester quelques trucs mais j'ai pas trop le temps là. Suivant
