LokaNova et Freelang

slt a tous j'ai un gros problème; je passe mon oral d'anglais dans une semaine environ et je suis nul en anglais....... Il faut que je parle de mes stages durant ces 2 derniere années.
Voici le texte:
Durant ces deux années en B.T.S j'ai réalisé, en 1ère année, un stage au crédit agricole à Montreuil sur Mer où ma mission était de proposer des comptes clients par téléphone. Je regrette de ne pas avoir eu de contact direct avec les clients.
En deuxième année, j'ai effectué mon stage chez Leroy Merlin à merlimont. J'ai réalisé une implantation de rayon avec l'équipe du rayon peinture et j'ai également réimplanté les tête de gondole du rayon moquette. Ce fut un stage trés intéressant mais qui n'a, à mon goût, pas duré assez longtemps (3 semaine).

Si quelqu'un peut me traduire ceci je serai sauvé.

Voici ce que j'ai essayé de faire:

During this two years ago in BTS , I am realize, in first years, a training in Crédit Agricole, from Montreuil sur mer where my "mission" was proposed "comptes clients" by phone. I regret no having direct contacts with customers.
In the second years, I have "effectué" my training in Leroy Merlin in Merlimont. I have realize a shelves reimplantation with shelves team paint and fitted carpet. It was a very interesting training but it haven't, in my taste, not during enough long. ( three weeks)


Merci.

capucine_62 wrote:During this two years ago in BTS , I am realize, in first years, a training in Crédit Agricole, from Montreuil sur mer where my "mission" was proposed "comptes clients" by phone. I regret no having direct contacts with customers.
In the second years, I have "effectué" my training in Leroy Merlin in Merlimont. I have realize a shelves reimplantation with shelves team paint and fitted carpet. It was a very interesting training but it haven't, in my taste, not during enough long. ( three weeks)

Bcp a reecrire mais en attendant que mon repas soit pret

During those two years ...... i have done ( au lieu de realized ) a training period ( stage ) in CA located in Montreuil/mer. I was in charge of .... offering "customers account" ( comptes clients ) ( a confirmer la phrase pliz ). I just regret not to have customers i front of me.

the next year i have "done" my training period. ..... it was a very interesting training period but it was too short as it durates only three weeks.

C'est une proposition, un anglophone confirmera j'espere.
Bonsoir

Je jette un oeil et je poste une petite correction. Une Nordiste se doit d'aider une Pas-de-Calaisienne.

Gaffe Didine ils ont perdu des barres radioactives dans ta region !!!!!

czort wrote:Gaffe Didine ils ont perdu des barres radioactives dans ta region !!!!!

Je suis loin de Gravelines, ouf! Le pire c'est que c'est pas la 1e fois que ça leur arrive...

Voici donc ce que je propose, en attendant le passage d'un locuteur natif, qui pourra sans doute beaucoup mieux faire.

I did two internships during the two years of my advanced vocational training (BTS).
When I was in first year, I did an internship at Crédit Agricole in Montreuil-sur-Mer. My role was to offer accounts to customers by phone. I regret I wasn't in direct contact with customers.
When I was in second year, I did an internship at Leroy Merlin in Merlimont. I laid out the paint department with the help of the team in charge of it. I also reorganised the sales shelves (gondolas) of the fitted carpet department. This training was very interesting but it lasted only three weeks, which was not enough, in my opinion.

Hello Didine Ne te sous-estime pas - un locuteur natif pourra au mieux 'un très peu' mieux faire. Donc voilà ce que je propose:
Andréas

I did two internships during the two years of my advanced vocational training (BTS).
In THE first year, I did an internship at Crédit Agricole in Montreuil-sur-Mer. My role was to offer accounts to customers by phone. I regret THAT I wasn't in direct contact with customers.
In THE second year, I did an internship at Leroy Merlin in Merlimont. I laid out the paint department with the help of the team in charge of it. I also reorganised the sales shelves (gondolas) of the fitted carpet department. This training was very interesting but it lasted only three weeks, which was not enough, in my opinion

ca a lair pas mal ca