Rédaction en anglais!
Posted: 02 Oct 2004 18:30
Bonsoir à tous. Voila j'ai une rédaction de 300 mots à faire, pourriez vous me corrigé car je sens qu'elle est pleine de fautes. Je vous donne quand même le sujet:
tu viens juste d'enménager dans une nouvelle maison.Toi et ton ami faites une découverte innatendue. écrivez à ce sujet..
This unexpected discovery had taken place during a winter evening into the new house where I live yet.
When my family and me have arrived in our new house, we wasn't confident because it was big, cheerless and mystik. Personnaly, I felt it looked like manor of horror. My room was dusty and the walls smelled musty.It was very difficult for me to adapt to this new surroundings. In addition my parents worked enormously therefore they don't listened to me. In the school, I had pratically not friends because I found them strange. They had appeared sad and at the sametime nasty. Unapool was a mysterious and isolated city. The weekend, I explored this house and as early asI have discovered this photo album in the granary, I had delusions. The photos dated apparently of 1859. I saw often faces appear but my parents doesn't believed me, they felt I was crazy. They wanted almost to call a psychiatrist for me. Alone my freiend Paul believed me, I spend long hours to telephone him relate all. We had assented to spent a weekend together when my parents will be not present. Before his visit, I have understood that persons on the photos had lived here and the body of a girl of this family had disappeared. I have equally found: mop, ax, knife,shot,gun,sword,opium in differents places of the house. I felt something of seedy and I needed absolutely to know the truh with my friend. When he has arrived this famous weekend, we had decided to make a fire because it snowed outside and we had cold. After dinner, we wanted to go to visit the last place I don't saw, it was a question of the cellar. This night will have been the more revealing. We have discovered the presence of a well. It respired the humidity and appeared deep. Suddenly, in my head voices have got down to scream: help me!help me; I fear! I want to exit!! Paul refused to descend in the well with me but I was courageous. Paul was very streese and me I heeded my intuition. I took my torch and went down by the scale. Here I saw a skeleton dressed of a pretty pink frock.
It is so I canned to understand finnaly ce qui s'était produit (je narive pas à traduire) and know maybe the reason for which the people were if strange and why this house had abandoned for a long time.
Merci de bien vouloir me répondre.
tu viens juste d'enménager dans une nouvelle maison.Toi et ton ami faites une découverte innatendue. écrivez à ce sujet..
This unexpected discovery had taken place during a winter evening into the new house where I live yet.
When my family and me have arrived in our new house, we wasn't confident because it was big, cheerless and mystik. Personnaly, I felt it looked like manor of horror. My room was dusty and the walls smelled musty.It was very difficult for me to adapt to this new surroundings. In addition my parents worked enormously therefore they don't listened to me. In the school, I had pratically not friends because I found them strange. They had appeared sad and at the sametime nasty. Unapool was a mysterious and isolated city. The weekend, I explored this house and as early asI have discovered this photo album in the granary, I had delusions. The photos dated apparently of 1859. I saw often faces appear but my parents doesn't believed me, they felt I was crazy. They wanted almost to call a psychiatrist for me. Alone my freiend Paul believed me, I spend long hours to telephone him relate all. We had assented to spent a weekend together when my parents will be not present. Before his visit, I have understood that persons on the photos had lived here and the body of a girl of this family had disappeared. I have equally found: mop, ax, knife,shot,gun,sword,opium in differents places of the house. I felt something of seedy and I needed absolutely to know the truh with my friend. When he has arrived this famous weekend, we had decided to make a fire because it snowed outside and we had cold. After dinner, we wanted to go to visit the last place I don't saw, it was a question of the cellar. This night will have been the more revealing. We have discovered the presence of a well. It respired the humidity and appeared deep. Suddenly, in my head voices have got down to scream: help me!help me; I fear! I want to exit!! Paul refused to descend in the well with me but I was courageous. Paul was very streese and me I heeded my intuition. I took my torch and went down by the scale. Here I saw a skeleton dressed of a pretty pink frock.
It is so I canned to understand finnaly ce qui s'était produit (je narive pas à traduire) and know maybe the reason for which the people were if strange and why this house had abandoned for a long time.
Merci de bien vouloir me répondre.
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J'ai l'impression de l'avoir déjà lu sur mes anciens annabac d'anglais... 
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Certes, on peut peut-être reprocher à notre invitée ce défaut - au reste courant chez n'importe quel lycéen, que je fus aussi - de surutiliser le dico un peu rapidement (enfin à ce qu'il semble, moi je ne suis pas angliciste). Mais il serait peut-être plus idoine de lui conseiller de ne plus le faire que de lui reprocher de l'avoir fait, non ?
Même si c'est un peu fastidieux. Ca fait deux jours que je suis sur un thème latin...