LokaNova et Freelang

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Many languages are spoken by South Africa's population. These languages represent the country's cultural diversity. Even if the inhabitants have adopted many Western ..., their languages, their music forms, and songs are stayed cultural traditions. A little South African fusion of cultural forms, African and Western, has changed.

At University, I have two very good friends from South Africa. Last year, my friends decided to get married during the summer in Johannesburg, their home-town. As I'm a very good friend of theirs, I was invited to the wedding. I'm not have a job because I'm a student. I did not think I could possibly afford the trip since the flight was very expensive. So I managed to go to Johannesburg and attend their wedding.
My parents were thrilled when they heard I was invited to stay in South Africa contrary to I thought : they would like me to go on that trip. On the one hand, they paid for my flight. So that, they were extremely happy to contribute to this trip. Thus, I decided to give them a nice present.
On the other hand, I came back with a film I made with all the people I et and all the places I visited for I did not buy souvenirs.
Now, they want to go there too. merci pour votre aide[/code]

Salut

J'ai fait des modifs de ton texte avec les commentaires ci-dessous. Désolé de l'avoir beaucoup changé. Ton texte n'était pas mal mais je l'ai rendu plus fluide à ma facon.

Andréas
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Many languages are spoken by South Africa's population. These languages represent the country's cultural diversity. Even if the inhabitants have adopted many Western traditions, their languages, their music forms, and songs have remained unchanged. A little South African fusion of cultural forms, African and Western, has changed.

At University, I became very good friends with two South Africans. Last year, my friends decided to get married during the summer in Johannesburg, their home-town. As I'm a very good friend of theirs, I was invited to the wedding. I don't have a job because I'm a student. I did not think I could possibly afford the trip since the flight was very expensive. However, in the end, I managed to go to Johannesburg and attend their wedding.
To my surprise, my parents were thrilled when they heard that I'd been invited to stay in South Africa. So they were more than happy to contribute to the trip, and in fact they paid for my flight. Thus, I decided to give them a nice present. However, I did not buy any souvenirs; I came back with a film I'd made of all the people I'd met and all the places I'd been to. Now, they want to go there too!


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I do not understand
'A little South African fusion of cultural forms, African and Western, has changed.'

I did not follow your train of thought for the last two paragraphs and have reworded a bit. They seemed a bit wordy. However perhaps you could say why you did not expect your parents to be thrilled. Also I wasnt sure of what your were trying to say with 'on the one hand...on the other hand'.

"At University, I became very good friends with two South Africans"

Je pense que t'as oublié d'enlever le s à friend

En fait, ma version est correcte, enfin c'est la version qui me vient à l'ésprit... Mais je comprends bien ton raissonement, et je ne peux pas expliquer pourquoi on met un 's'. Ca me semble etre quelque chose qui alimente les conversations entres grammariens...

Maybe we could instead say
I met two South Africans, and we became very good friends.

Vu que les deux autres se sont devenus des bon potes aussi (au point de se marier)

A mon avis, ce serait :
- I became very good friend (sans s) with two South Africans
- I and two South Africans became very good friends