Bonjour,
J'aurais aimé savoir si ces quelques mots en anglais sont corrects :
You are looking for a young and dynamic engineer, always ready to face new challenges. Graduated at University X, and then specialised in….at Y, I have always desired working in the international companies.
I hope continuing my professional career as……. to get, in the same company, a job with more responsibilities, like…...
Working with you, in an important international company, will let me to develop my personal faculties, to travel around the world and to use my operative and technical knowledge.
My relational capacities, my adaptability, and the precedent working experiences in ….. and in …. are some qualities I would like use with you.
I have a strong desire to show my leader skills so I wish meet you as soon as possible in order to discuss about our future collaboration.
My salary would be situated between ….. Euro/year. You will find attached here my CV, have a nice day, sincerely,
Merci pour votre aide
Help : Correction anglais !!!
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Re: Help : Correction anglais !!!
You are looking for a young and dynamic engineer, always ready to face new challenges. Graduated at University X, then specialised in….at Y, I have always wished to work in international companies.
I hope continuing my professional career as……. in the same company, to get a job with more responsibilities like…...
Working with you in an important international company will let me develop my personal faculties, travel around the world and use my operative and technical knowledge.
My relational abilities, my adaptability, and the previous working experiences in ….. and in …. are some qualities I would like to use with you.
I have a strong desire to show my leader skills so I hope I can meet you as soon as possible in order to discuss about our future collaboration.
My wages would be situated between ….. Euro/year. You will find my CV with this. Have a nice day. Sincerely,
Voila, j'ai corrigé comme je le pensais... Attendre quand meme l'avis d un anglophone.
I hope continuing my professional career as……. in the same company, to get a job with more responsibilities like…...
Working with you in an important international company will let me develop my personal faculties, travel around the world and use my operative and technical knowledge.
My relational abilities, my adaptability, and the previous working experiences in ….. and in …. are some qualities I would like to use with you.
I have a strong desire to show my leader skills so I hope I can meet you as soon as possible in order to discuss about our future collaboration.
My wages would be situated between ….. Euro/year. You will find my CV with this. Have a nice day. Sincerely,
Voila, j'ai corrigé comme je le pensais... Attendre quand meme l'avis d un anglophone.
Surtout pour cette phrase !!You will find attached here my CV, have a nice day, sincerely,
Le marché de l’emploi est en plein mouvement !
J’ai corrigé le texte originel, mais Kyoichi a raison : ‘Have a nice day’ est plutot orale et plutot americain (un peu déplacé dans une LM). Et à mon avis, il faut montrer au prospectif employeur ce que vous allez LUI apporter (pas l’inverse). Il faut jouer le jeu, meme si ce nest pas evident pour un premier emploi.
S’il faut donner des exigences niveau salaire, je mettrai plutot quelqeu chose comme :
I would be willing to discuss the job package, including salary, at an interview.
Dear XXX
I am an engineer seeking a position as a XXX. I graduated at University X, and then specialised in….at Y. I enclose my CV for your consideration.
It has always been my ambition to work for an international company. I hope to continue my professional career as a ……. and would relish the opportunity to progress and gain more responsibilities.
I feel that working for a major international company, such as X, will allow me to develop my personal abilities, to travel around the world and to use my operational and technical knowledge. In addition, my interpersonal skills, my adaptability, and my previous work experience in ….. and in …. will mean that I could start making a real contribution very rapidly.
Please do not hesitate to contact me for further information.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely
J’ai corrigé le texte originel, mais Kyoichi a raison : ‘Have a nice day’ est plutot orale et plutot americain (un peu déplacé dans une LM). Et à mon avis, il faut montrer au prospectif employeur ce que vous allez LUI apporter (pas l’inverse). Il faut jouer le jeu, meme si ce nest pas evident pour un premier emploi.
S’il faut donner des exigences niveau salaire, je mettrai plutot quelqeu chose comme :
I would be willing to discuss the job package, including salary, at an interview.
Dear XXX
I am an engineer seeking a position as a XXX. I graduated at University X, and then specialised in….at Y. I enclose my CV for your consideration.
It has always been my ambition to work for an international company. I hope to continue my professional career as a ……. and would relish the opportunity to progress and gain more responsibilities.
I feel that working for a major international company, such as X, will allow me to develop my personal abilities, to travel around the world and to use my operational and technical knowledge. In addition, my interpersonal skills, my adaptability, and my previous work experience in ….. and in …. will mean that I could start making a real contribution very rapidly.
Please do not hesitate to contact me for further information.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely
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Un grand merci.
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