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[La Marmotte]

Salut à tous, pour mardi 6 février, je dois inventer un récit faisant intervenir des fantômes. Voilà, j’espère que vous comprenez.

THE DAY 31

For a long time, I’m fan of old houses, castles…Therefore, a day, I decided to buy a castle. My name is Mrs Smith. I’m duchess that’s why I’m wealthy and I could buy this castle. When I bought this, I didn’t expect the castle to be haunted. Moreover spirits are said not to exist.
This castle was situated in Scotland, in a little town near the city of Dumfries. It had a private chapel, a well, a windmill, a lot of paintings inside the castle... It was a three-storied castle and it was built in 1632. Therefore I decided to buy it however it was nicknamed the « the day 31» ; I didn’t know what it meant.
I settled in the castle in 1991. During 4 years, I lived peacefully but Monday 31 february, it happened extraordinary something.
Indeed in the evening , I was sleeping when I was woken by terrible noises which came from the room next to mine. Firstly, I decided to go to see what happened. While I standing up, I saw a ghost ! Secondly I thought : « what a terrible monster ! ». It was very terrifying because there were flames around him, he smelt bad and he was carrying a knife in his right hand, and went through walls. His clothes were burnt by the flames and he was wearing chains. It was the most terrifying creature that I had ever seen. Moreover, my dog was barking. I didn’t know what I had to do. Little by little, he was heading towards me and said « I’m going to avenge myself ! ». Next, he repeated it many times. As for me, I repeated « God save me » : I was so panic-stricken that I didn’t move. Instead of staying like it, I say myself « you’d better be courageous ». Consequently I decided to switch on the light. Suddenly, he must have been dazzled by the light for he put his hands on his eyes. Therefore, he set off and disappeared. He didn’t go again.
The next day, I did searches for this castle to know a little bit the history of my haunted castle. I discovered that it was built by two rich personns in1632, a man and his wife. This man had a brother who wasn’t rich that’s why he decided to burgle shops. He succeeded. But his brother denounced him and he was sent to jail and was sentenced to death : he was burnt. But on his woofshed, he sweared to avenge himself every 31 february. Then in 1636, he murdered his brother and his wife. Since this day, he went on killing the owners of the castle : there were 18 victims until now.
That’s why, every 31 february, she switch on the lights till the end of her life.


Voilà, j’espère que ça vous a plu.
Est ce que quelqu’un peut me corriger les fautes ?

[Maurice la Grammaire]

Il y a une faute de sens : il n'y a pas de 31 février... à moins que ce soit de l'humour anglais !

[Dada]

THE DAY 31

For a long time, I've been a fan of old houses, castles (mansions(manoirs) ca peut aller aussi)…Therefore, one day, I decided to buy a castle. My name is Mrs Smith. I’m a duchess that’s why I’m wealthy and I could buy this castle. When I bought it, I didn’t expect the castle to be haunted. Moreover spirits are said not to exist.
This castle was situated in Scotland, in a little town near the city of Dumfries. It had a private chapel, a well, a windmill, a lot of paintings inside the castle... It was a three-storied castle and it was built in 1632. Therefore I decided to buy it however it was nicknamed « the day 31» ; I didn’t know what it meant.
I settled in the castle in 1991. During 4 years, I lived peacefully but on Monday 31 february, something extraordinary happended.
Indeed in the evening , I was sleeping when I was woken up by terrible noises coming from the room next to mine. Firstly, I decided to go to see what happened. While I was standing up, I saw a ghost ! Secondly I thought : « what a terrible monster ! ». It was very terrifying because there were flames around him, he smelt bad and he was carrying a knife in his right hand, and was going through walls. His clothes were burnt by the flames and he was wearing chains. It was the most terrifying creature that I had ever seen. Moreover, my dog was barking. I didn’t know what I had to do. Little by little, he was heading towards me and said « I’m going to avenge myself ! ». Then, he repeated it many times. As for me, I repeated « God save me » : I was so panic-stricken that I didn’t move. Instead of standing there, I said myself « you’d better be courageous ». Consequently I decided to switch on the light. Suddenly, he must have been dazzled by the light for he put his hands on his eyes. Therefore, he set off and disappeared. He didn’t come again.
The next day, I did searches for this castle to know a little bit the history of my haunted castle. I discovered that it was built by two rich personns in1632, a man and his wife. This man had a brother who wasn’t rich that’s why he decided to burgle shops. He succeeded. But his brother denounced him and he was sent to jail and was sentenced to death : he was burnt. But on his woofshed, he sweared to avenge himself every february 31. Then in 1636, he murdered his brother and his wife. Since this day, he went on killing the owners of the castle : there were 18 victims until now.
That’s why, every february 31, she (c'est qui "she"? la duchesse? dans ce cas il faut dire "I") switch on the lights till the end of her life.

Voila quelques correction en rouge. Dans l'ensemble c'est pas mal
Pour little by little je suis pas sur que ca se dise. Faudrait verifier.

[La Marmotte]

oui tu as raison excuse moi, je voulais dire le 31 janvier !

[La Marmotte]

Voila quelques correction en rouge. Dans l'ensemble c'est pas mal
Pour little by little je suis pas sur que ca se dise. Faudrait verifier.

merci beaucoup!
j'ai vérifié pour little by little