je suis tout nouveau ici , voila je vient de participer a un concour dans le quelque en doit écrire un résumer d'une histoire malheureusement ce concour et en anglais et je suis débutant en anglais si quelqu'un pourrai me dire si mon anglais est correcte merci de votre aide

"Freedom"
The environment is often considered to be all things around us, all natural and artificial elements within which takes place human life.
The reality is more complex, since through respiration, food, drink, percutaneous penetration, and some radiation, the so-called elements of the environment and enter permanently alter the internal environment of living beings, which is why we speak of Nowadays environmental health.
Imagine a computer so powerful, which is capable of interacting with our environment. Imagine that you are about to suicidez you, close your eyes and imagine a second. You are at the top of an 8-storey building, ready to swing. That just before you Throw, the computer would show you the consequences of your actions. You will see your loved ones in tears, you see your own funeral, you will see that there are many people who love you. You suicideriez you? If you knew all his? The computer does show you the consequences, you make your choice! After all, you are free of your actions. Now imagine that you are about to throw a butt in a forest by a dry hot summer. The would you do if you knew that this ridiculous act also happens will be dead? Are you the first ITT if you see your own death?
Many people have unfortunately not enough rearward on the moment to realize the seriousness of their actions. The computer is to help, they show you things that you will never see at the time, the consequences of your actions.
Benji is a young driver who has just had her license, but unfortunately, like a lot of young benji has a problem with alcohol. That night he had drink too much , that evening he no longer had control of the vehicle! Tonight there will change his life forever.