Devoir en Anglais : besoin d'une correction. Thanks

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Devoir en Anglais : besoin d'une correction. Thanks

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J'ai juste besoin d'une petite correction ;)


Last year, two friends of my mum ( Brigitte and Florence ) went to Australia to go scuba diving in the Great Barrier Reef. After getting certified, they decided to do their first dive trip. They got all the equipment they needed and dived with a dive master.
When diving, the view took their breath away.
As they were watching the fish, Brigitte saw that something was coming towards her. She panicked and hurted her leg to a stone.
She began to lose a lot of blood. She could now identify the thing.
It was a Tiger shark. She didn't know much about it but she was sure that he was extremely dangerous. She remembered that sharks were attracted by blood. She tried to prevent her friend but Florence was too far to see her.
While rising to the surface, the shark was approaching her. She decided to remain still. It was too late because the shark was already excited by the taste of blood ans was headed straight towards Brigitte.
While the dive master was looking for Brigitte, Florence did know what has happened when she saw a lot of blood in front of her.
Florence has never been into the sea since then.


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Last year, two friends of my mum ( Brigitte and Florence ) went to Australia to go scuba diving in the Great Barrier Reef.

On dirait plutôt "two friends of my mum's" ou "two of my mum's friends"

After getting certified, they decided to do their first dive trip. They got all the equipment they needed and dived with a dive master.
When diving, the view took their breath away.
As they were watching the fish, Brigitte saw that something was coming towards her. She panicked and hurted her leg to a stone.

Le prétérit de hurt est hurt (hurt, hurt, hurt). Je ne suis pas sûre de "to a stone", moi j'aurais dit "on a stone" mais vraiment pas sûre, attention! :)

She began to lose a lot of blood. She could now identify the thing.
It was a Tiger shark. She didn't know much about it but she was sure that he was extremely dangerous. She remembered that sharks were attracted by blood. She tried to prevent her friend but Florence was too far to see her.

Si c'est pour dire prévenir: "She tried to warn her friend"


While rising to the surface, the shark was approaching her. She decided to remain still. It was too late because the shark was already excited by the taste of blood ans was headed straight towards Brigitte.
While the dive master was looking for Brigitte, Florence did know what has happened when she saw a lot of blood in front of her.
Je dirais: Florence understood what had happened

Florence has never been into the sea since then.

Il vaut quand même mieux attendre d'autres opinions, surtout d'anglophones :)
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Post by addicted_to_languages »

Personne d'autre ne peut m'aider ? :(
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Euh ben ça a l'air de te faire plaisir le peu que j'ai fait....De rien! :-?
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Anonymous wrote:Euh ben ça a l'air de te faire plaisir le peu que j'ai fait....De rien! :-?
oops c'était moi :)
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Re: Devoir en Anglais : besoin d'une correction. Thanks

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[tout est faut a re voir professur d'anglais
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Post by addicted_to_languages »

Taggle ;)


Si Cati, je suis très contente :D
Désolée de ne pas t'avoir remercié plus tôt :confused:
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Re: Devoir en Anglais : besoin d'une correction. Thanks

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Anonymous wrote:[tout est faut a re voir professur d'anglais
Et un professeur de français pour toi non? :lol:
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Je pense aussi :)
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