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Bonjour !
Quelqu'un peut-il lire ce texte et me dire s'il comporte des fautes SVP ?
Merci !!!! :D

Junk food 'may lead to eating addiction'

This article the headline of which is "Junk food 'may lead to eating addiction'" was extracted from the Daily Telegraph. It deals with the junk food that is to say food like hamburgers, chips, sodas and his consequences on the biological and physical behaviour. So, what are the risks of eating junk food ?

According to scientists eating junk food could cause an addictive behaviour like drugs : it modify hormones and provokes a need to eat and a loss of self-control when there is no more junk food to eat. But this addiction grow as soon as we eat a simple fast-food meal. Moreover, it provoks the same effects as drugs : there is an addiction, i always said it, but it cause changes in bran structure usually associated with addiction to drugs. As we eat junk food, it's necessary to increase quantities to feel the same level of satisfaction. So, John Hoebel, a psychologist at Princeton University in New Jersey says that sugar and fat have the same effect than drugs like heroin.
His experimention had proved it. He had researched into rats and had gave them a quarter sugar, more less that habitually. After they had eaten it, John Hoebel discovered that rats shooked and had chattering teeth like people who are addicted to drugs. Anne Kelley, a neuroscientist at the University of Wisconsin Medical School in Madison, came to a similar conclusion. Owing to the junk food, the brains of the rats were modified and the rats ate more fat.
This results could be the cause of the soaring obesity rates and the success of fast-food outlets. But not without consequences since a middle-aged New York janitor, Caesar Barber, brought a lawsuit to McDonald's, Burger King, KFC and Wendy's accusing them of his obesity and of his multiple heart-attack. But he didn't win the lawsuit. Nevertheless, the big fast-food industries will be obvious sued a new time by lawyers which want that the food industry contributes to health care costs of obesity. The new studies bolster them saying that eating junk food switch off the substance control the sensation of hunger.

In this article, the journalist wants to denouce the consequences of the consumption of junk food. He wants to make people aware of that with a headline who interpellate. Moreover, he shows that the food industry need to be blame for the soaring of obesity rates and of the addiction to junk food.

This article reminds me to the problem of obesity in the developed countries. Indeed, since a few years, the obesity rates are more and more important. Faced to it, the governments think that it's necessary to consider obesity as a public affair for the health of the countries. In a article of december of The Economist entitled "The world is too bad. Too fat." talks about the public intervention and conclude that it's necessary to respect the people liberty because they can buy what they want. But i don't agree with it. I think it's necessary to intervene respecting people liberty. How to do it ? There is three ways : intervene in the food industry, guarantee to peolple medicine care and give responsabilities to people leading a campaing against obesity. Limitate the food industry is not the better solution, the effects are very limited. But it could permit to finance health care costs of obesity like the journalist says it in this article. So, the policies need to prevent people from obesity and assure them health care. People should eat more better, not less, that is the solution. As the proverb says it "An apple a day keeps the doctor away".
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This article the headline of which is "Junk food 'may lead to eating addiction'" was extracted from the Daily Telegraph. It deals with the pas d'article ici junk food that is to say food like hamburgers, chips, sodas and his consequences on the biological and physical behaviour. So, what are the risks of eating junk food ?

According to scientists eating junk food could cause an addictive behaviour like drugs : it modify modifies hormones and provokes a need to eat and a loss of self-control when there is no more junk food to eat. But this addiction grows as soon as we eat a simple fast-food meal. Moreover, it provokes the same effects as drugs : there is an addiction, i always said it, but it causes changes in brain structure usually associated with addiction to drugs. As we eat junk food, it's necessary to increase quantities to feel the same level of satisfaction. So, John Hoebel, a psychologist at Princeton University in New Jersey says that sugar and fat have the same effect than drugs like heroin.
His experimention had proved it. He had researched into rats and had gave given. Mais j'aurais plutôt mis ce passage au prétérit them a quarter sugar, more less that habitually Je comprends pas là. After they had eaten it, John Hoebel discovered that rats shooked shook and had chattering teeth like people who are addicted to drugs. Anne Kelley, a neuroscientist at the University of Wisconsin Medical School in Madison, came to a similar conclusion. Owing to the junk food, the brains of the rats were modified and the rats ate more fat.
This results could be the cause of the soaring obesity rates and the success of fast-food outlets. But not without consequences since a middle-aged New York janitor, Caesar Barber, brought a lawsuit to McDonald's, Burger King, KFC and Wendy's accusing them of his obesity and of his multiple heart-attacks. But he didn't win the lawsuit. Nevertheless, the big fast-food industries will be obviously sued a new time again tout simplement ? by lawyers which who want that the food industry contributes to health care costs of obesity. The new studies bolster them saying that eating junk food switches off the substance that/which control the sensation of hunger.

In this article, the journalist wants to denounce the consequences of the consumption of junk food. He wants to make people aware of that with a headline who which interpellates people. Moreover, he shows that the food industry needs plutôt is to be blamed for the soaring of obesity rates and (of) the addiction to junk food.

This article reminds me to of the problem of obesity in the developed countries. Indeed, since for a few years, the obesity rates are have been more and more important. Faced to it, the governments think that it's necessary to consider obesity as a public affair for (the) health (of the countries). In a article of december of The Economist An article published in December in The Economist entitled "The world is too bad. Too fat." talks about the public intervention and conclude that it's necessary to respect people's liberty because they can buy what they want. But i don't agree with it. I think it's necessary to intervene respecting people liberty je comprends pas là. How to do it ? There is are three ways : intervening in the food industry, guarantee ing to peolple medicine care and giving responsabilities to people leading a campaing against obesity. Limitating the food industry is not the better best solution, the effects are very limited. But it could permit to finance health care costs of obesity like the journalist says it in this article. So, the policies need to prevent people from obesity and assure them health care. People should eat more better pas très clair là, not less, that is the solution. As the proverb says it "An apple a day keeps the doctor away".
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Salut Maïwenn !
Merci pour ta réponse très rapide !
J'ai quelques questions à te poser (à toi ou aux autres d'ailleurs) :
1) Dans quels cas mettre l'article "the" ?
2) Mais j'aurais plutôt mis ce passage au prétérit them a quarter sugar, more less that habitually Je comprends pas là. ===> je voulais mettre "beaucoup moins que d'habitude". Que faut-il mettre dans ce cas si l'on veut dire "beaucoup moins que d'habitude" ?
3) I think it's necessary to intervene respecting people liberty je comprends pas là. ===> Je voulais mettre : "je pense qu'il est nécessaire d'intervenir en respectant la liberté des gens". Que dois-je dire si je veux remplacer cela par "je pense qu'il est nécessaire d'intervenir publiquement tout en respectant la liberté des gens" ?
Voili, voilou.
Encore merci. ;)
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This article the headline of which is (which headline is) ... was extracted from the Daily Telegraph. It deals (delt - tu as commencé par un verbe au prétérit) ... that is to say food like (such as - ça rend ta phrase moins 'lourde' parce que tu cites des exemples) hamburgers, chips, sodas and his (its - 'junk food' n'est pas un humain) ...

According to scientists (,) eating junk food ... i (I) always said it ... the same effect than (as) drugs like heroin.

After they had eaten (ate - tu n'as pas besoin du past perfect ici) it, John Hoebel discovered that rats ...
This (These - pluriel) results ...

In this article, the journalist wants (wanted - tu continues avec le prétérit) to ... He wants (wanted) to ... he shows (showed) that ...

... the problem of obesity in the (tu n'as pas besoin de l'artcile) developed countries ... In a (an - voyelle) article ... talks (talked) about ... concludes (concluded) that it's necessary to respect ... But i(I) don't agree with it...
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Furosha wrote:1) Dans quels cas mettre l'article "the" ?
Les cas sont nombreux. Mais, par exemple, avant 'junk food' tu n'en n'as pas besoin parce qu'on parle de 'junk food' en général. Dans le cas des 'developed countries', c'est le même principe.
Furosha wrote:2) Mais j'aurais plutôt mis ce passage au prétérit them a quarter sugar, more less that habitually Je comprends pas là. ===> je voulais mettre "beaucoup moins que d'habitude". Que faut-il mettre dans ce cas si l'on veut dire "beaucoup moins que d'habitude" ?
'Less quantity of sugar than what he used to give them.' ou 'Less sugar than he used to give them.'
Furosha wrote:3) I think it's necessary to intervene respecting people liberty je comprends pas là. ===> Je voulais mettre : "je pense qu'il est nécessaire d'intervenir en respectant la liberté des gens". Que dois-je dire si je veux remplacer cela par "je pense qu'il est nécessaire d'intervenir publiquement tout en respectant la liberté des gens" ?
It is necessary to intervene on a public basis while respecting people's liberty.
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Merci pour les explications Bouchera ! ;)
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Merci à toi Bouchera d'avoir pu répondre à mes questions ! :D
Et merci aussi à toi Maïwenn pour ta réponse !!!
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De rien ! :)

Waou, je me sens transperçée par ton oeil
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:sun:
Voilà la photo d'où j'ai pris mon avatar, elle est impressionnante !

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Pourvu qu'elle s'affiche, pourvu qu'elle s'affiche.... :hello:

*Après un ptit edit ça marche !*
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Elle ne peut pas s'afficher si elle est sur ton disque dur... Il faut donner un lien en ligne.

Mais je crois que je vois à qui appartient cet oeil :)
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Furôsha wrote:Pourvu qu'elle s'affiche, pourvu qu'elle s'affiche.... :hello:
Non :-?
La photo ne s'affichera que si tu donnes son adresse sur internet, pas sur ton disque dur.
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Ca doit marcher maintenant puisque je vois la magnifique photo :D
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boubbie wrote:Ca doit marcher maintenant puisque je vois la magnifique photo :D
Maintenant qu'il a modifié son message, ça marche mieux ;)
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Furôsha wrote:Merci à toi Bouchera d'avoir pu répondre à mes questions ! :D
De rien! Ce fut un plaisir. :)
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