correction d'une phrase en anglais

[marlène]

Bonjour,

est-ce que quelqu'un peut me dire si ma phrase est juste, ou si il y a des fautes ?


As my arrival comes closer, I have a few questions.

Where could I get my keys on my arrival, in your previous email you said you will let me know the time staff are on site. Unfortunately, I could only arrive about 5pm on 14th Januray.

And have I to pay something now for the accomadation, because until now I have had nothing to pay ?



Merci, et bonne année 2006

Marlène

[kokoyaya]

Unfortunately, I could only arrive about 5pm on 14th Januray. => I will only be able to arrive...

And have I to pay something now for the accomadation => accommodation


Voilou

[marlène]

Merci beaucoup.

[J]

Salut Marlène
ANTHOS est l'homme pour corriger ton texte mais j'essaie quand meme

As my arrival comes closer, I have a few questions.

Where could I get my keys on my arrival, in your previous email you said you will let me know the time staff are on site. Unfortunately, I could only arrive about 5pm on 14th Januray.

And have I to pay something now for the accomadation, because until now I have had nothing to pay ?

Where can I get (/collect) my keys on my arrival?
In your previous email you said you will let me know what time staff are on site
Unfortunately, I will only be able to arrive about 5pm on 14th January. (comme l'a dit Koko)
And do I have to pay anything now for the accommodation? Because until now I haven't had to pay anything.

[ANTHOS]

Thanks for the compliment, J.

This is how I would change the original; some corrections for grammar, others for style (most mentioned already).

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As my arrival APPROACHES, I have a few questions.

Where CAN I get my keys WHEN I ARRIVE. In your previous email you said you WOULD let me know the time staff are on-site. Unfortunately, I WILL ONLY BE ABLE to arrive AT about 5pm on 14th January.

And DO I have to pay anything for the accommodation now? Until now, I haven’t had to pay anything.

[theos]

juste pour ameliorer la reponse de Anthos:

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As my arrival approaches, I have a few questions.

Where can I get my keys when I arrive? In your previous email you said you would let me know the time staff WILL BE on-site. Unfortunately, I will only be able to arrive at about 5pm on THE 14th OF January.

And do I have to pay anything for the accommodation now? Until now, I haven’t had to pay anything YET.

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voila, tout est parfait.

[Fuokusu]

"Will be"?Ca veut rien dire si l'on veut connaître les horaires de présence du personnel...

Pour les dates,pas de "the" entre "on" et la date en question.

"Yet"?Relis la question d'avant car c'était une obligation et la personne n'a pas payé jusqu'à maintenant donc pas besoin de "yet".

[J]

"Will be"?Ca veut rien dire si l'on veut connaître les horaires de présence du personnel...

Pour les dates,pas de "the" entre "on" et la date en question.

"Yet"?Relis la question d'avant car c'était une obligation et la personne n'a pas payé jusqu'à maintenant donc pas besoin de "yet".

Je suis d'accord avec ça

[theos]

mon erreur,

j'ai cru que tu voulais savoir leur horaire quand tu arriveras par la.